Revising an essay with comment

I have an essay written and ready. My instructor asked me to revise this essay and I am going to post the instructor’s comments. I will also upload 2 articles that needed in writing this essay.

Comparative Rhetorical Analysis Essay (Fall 2019)CriteriaRatingsPts

Title & Introduction

20 pts

Full Marks

Title is appropriate and original Introduction includes a hook/attention-grabber. Context regarding the topic of graphic novels/comic books is provided. Both authors are introduced and sources are summarized. Thesis answers the Key Question and is highlighted yellow.

0 pts

No Marks

Comments

13 / 20 pts

Organization

30 pts

Full Marks

Body paragraphs have a clear topic. Body paragraphs discuss both authors. Body paragraphs progress in a logical order.

0 pts

No Marks

Comments

24 / 30 pts

Support & Integration of Sources

30 pts

Full Marks

Adequate evidence is used from both articles to support points. Paraphrase and quotation are used effectively.

0 pts

No Marks

Comments

20 / 30 pts

Rhetorical Analysis & Evaluation of Sources

60 pts

Full Marks

Comparison of rhetorical moves each author makes is effective. Analysis of rhetorical moves is clear and in-depth. Discussion of strengths and weaknesses of each text included. Evaluation of which article is more effective is clear. Personal opinions regarding topic are avoided.

0 pts

No Marks

Comments

40 / 60 pts

Conclusion

20 pts

Full Marks

Restates thesis and summarizes key points. Ends with a global statement about significance of analysis.

0 pts

No Marks

Comments

15 / 20 pts

Grammar, Highlighting, & MLA Format

40 pts

Full Marks

Grammar: There are few errors, and none that interfere with meaning. Highlighting: Thesis is highlighted yellow; topic sentences are highlighted green; body paragraph topics (one word or phrase) are in bold. [See student samples for more help with this annotation system.] MLA Formatting: Document is properly MLA formatted.

0 pts

No Marks

38 / 40 pts

Total Points: 150